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One of these days
my last breath will be
                  Stolen
From me


Not gently exhaled,
But       held tightly in my chest
Braced against the impact
                       that rips through me.


                    A painful gasp
                    To be my last.



      "Not how I dreamed it,"
    no air to whisper
  As darkness
overwhelms me.


                 An explosion of pain
                  And peace.



But not today.

Today I scream.

And know I'm alive.

And fighting.



The thief passes by again.
Another close call.
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AbysmalEternity Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
It's a good piece but all the extra stuff you added to it was really distracting and took away from the quality of it, I think.
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JiaRoyale Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2012  Student General Artist
I tried again, and it worked. ^^; Your comment has resulted in my original image for this piece being restored. Thank you very much.
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AbysmalEternity Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Glad to see you could fix it :) I agree with you, with the spacing and whatnot, it looks a lot better :)
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JiaRoyale Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2012  Student General Artist
Thank you. I've had another similar comment, I'll take it under advisement. First time I've attempted it, and I had to keep adjusting it because of how much it was distracting. Originally it was just spaces, and that worked, but I don't know how to keep spacing correct in dA. It all just shifts back to the left.
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